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Image size
6272x4733px 19.81 MB
Make
Canon
Model
Canon EOS 5D
Shutter Speed
1/50 second
Aperture
F/3.5
Focal Length
24 mm
ISO Speed
160
Date Taken
Aug 12, 2006, 8:43:15 PM
Sensor Size
51mm
Mature
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:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Impact

You are lucky to be able to work with such a beautiful model. I compare this picture with photoport.deviantart.com/art/c… which I also like a lot.

Obviously I did not see the whole session, but a variety of expressions from which to choose from in Photoshop post work would be my choice. Her half smile is nice, but I would to see all the various expression she could do.

Her pose is excellent, curves, peek a boo, angles, shy yet looking directly into the camera. Obviously you are a master with the camera.

I love the two window with the curtains. I like that you are tying to use sunlight to light your subject. I am disappointed that the light from the windows is not stronger in this picture.

The main concern of the picture in my mind is the vast white sheet at the bottom left corner of the picture. So, I copied the picture and opened up photoshop to see what I could see there.

Working with the picture inside Photoshop I find a delicate balancing act going on with this picture. First I cropped several ways, even tilting the canvas. I found that removing some of the extra bottom left corner helped the picture, although the bottom right corner curtain is very important; part of the left foot is expendable.

Then I adjusted various ways with the picture. Again, a delicate balancing act as the dainty innocence of the lady is important. I found these adjustments to be more pleasing to me: Copy image, crop, increase contrast, decrease brightness, copy layer set to screen mode increase saturation, copy screen layer possible more contrast, etc...

Now when I was done, and then I looked back at your beautiful pictures: photoport.deviantart.com/art/I… I realized that the broad WHITE sheet was fooling your camera/photoshop software, and mostly I had just cropped a bit and brought out the window illumination. So, its a very simple problem with the picture.

I turned the image into B&W and found it similar to the original meaning your saturation is fairly low, increasing it actually brought out a bit of artificial color into the whites which was pleasing to me.

Norman Rockwell used to create a story with his pictures which I really enjoyed. He said anyone could act if they were playing themselves.

To make an impact of a great picture, lighting and telling a story seem key to me. By adjusting your contrast you would bring out your lighting better. As far as telling a story, it seems to be "the sweet girl next door", indicated by the lack of jewels, cotton sheets, cute curtains. It would have been interesting if the pillow was less plain or the something occupied the lower right corner. Could you have traced curvy wrinkles in the sheet or left a nightgown/top sheet/teddy bear there? What about a necklace?

So many options, just remember you and your model are awesome, don't let the light meter mess you up.